Five months later Drake and Amanda were good friends and they knew each other so much. One day he told Amanda That he was a zombie but that the powers of their love where stronger that his life as zombie, so she understand his situation because she loved him so much, and she told him "I have to tell you something, Im a vampire" he said to her "i don't to go away from you" she replai "I don't want the same".
One week later he gone to his house with Amanda, and his parents noticed that she was a vampire!! and his parents got so angry with Drake and told him that this love are impossible. Amanda are so sad and Drake was so confused and sad.
However all, Drake and Amanda stayed together but their parents observe that that they were again in love so Drake's parents went to talk with the parents of Amanda; when they arrived to Amanda`s house they said that the disobedient of Amanda and Drake a war was coming. They were very sad and mad, and they decided that they will not be together again, because they didn't want start a war.
Two months after the parents of Drake and Amanda saw that they were very sad, so they decided to let them stay together, so everything will be okay and Amanda and Drake were together again and they got a great final.
The story is fine and you use good structures and vocabulary. There is not a good organizaton of the events of the story, which you can improve on that.
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